Feedback on "Saudades"

[ysabetwordsmith]

I've posted the last part of the poem "Saudades." It's gotten fewer responses than other stuff I've posted in this series, and more mixed. I'd like to pin down the differences ...

Poll #14931 Feedback on Saudades

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With 1 being dislike and 10 being like, how much did you enjoy "Saudades"?

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Mean: 7.24 Median: 7 Std. Dev 2.10

1		0 (0.0%)
2		1 (5.9%)
3		0 (0.0%)
4		1 (5.9%)
5		1 (5.9%)
6		1 (5.9%)
7		6 (35.3%)
8		2 (11.8%)
9		2 (11.8%)
10		3 (17.6%)

What did you like about this poem?

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Bruce-and-Hulk are favorite characters. I'll read almost anything about them.
7 (41.2%)

Emotional whump! YAY! Hit them again.
5 (29.4%)

I like the backstory.
9 (52.9%)

I like the inside perspective of Bruce-and-Hulk.
11 (64.7%)

I like poetry.
8 (47.1%)

I like your writing and read most/all of it.
11 (64.7%)

Something else.
2 (11.8%)

What did you dislike about this poem?

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I'm not a big fan of Bruce-and-Hulk.
0 (0.0%)

Too dark! Too dark! Turn up the lights.
3 (20.0%)

Poetry ... meh. I prefer fiction.
8 (53.3%)

Backstory doesn't grab me.
0 (0.0%)

Something else.
6 (40.0%)

Comments

Re: Thoughts

[(Anonymous)]

May I just say that it is NOT too early to have someone read Hulk Dr. Seuss? Because it really, really isn't. Hulk needs just as much love as any of them on Game Night, and we haven't seen him for a while, right, not since Bathtime? Well, I think Uncle Phil needs to get some Seuss books and read to Hulk if for some reason he can't or won't change back, or they finally decide it's time for him to change in the Tower on Game Night. Please? After Saudades, we need some lighthearted Hulk, maybe with Betty in her unicorn PJs reading to him too?

Re: Thoughts

[ysabetwordsmith]

>> May I just say that it is NOT too early to have someone read Hulk Dr. Seuss? <<

Thanks for discussing this in more detail. You got an extra story out of it.

>> Because it really, really isn't. Hulk needs just as much love as any of them on Game Night, and we haven't seen him for a while, right, not since Bathtime? <<

Yes, Hulk does need love, and different kinds of socialization.

>> Well, I think Uncle Phil needs to get some Seuss books and read to Hulk if for some reason he can't or won't change back, or they finally decide it's time for him to change in the Tower on Game Night. <<

Those are both good ideas, and I'll make a note of them. Catch is, Hulk is not quite ready to come out for game night yet, and Bruce is even farther from being willing to let him out. (Everybody else would jump on the idea by now. Bruce is emotionally "slow" and Hulk is reluctant to push him outside of emergencies.) So those will go in later stories.

>> Please? After Saudades, we need some lighthearted Hulk, maybe with Betty in her unicorn PJs reading to him too? <<

I did eventually think of another good opportunity, though, short and sweet. This one is next current chronology so I'll swap it in now.