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This poem is a Marvelverse crossover with Schrodinger's Heroes, and ties in with the Schrodinger's Hulk fiction series listed on the crossover page. It was partly inspired by some prompts from [personal profile] siliconshaman during the October 1, 2013 Poetry Fishbowl. I'm dividing the poem into parts because, yes, it's the size of a story; I do that sometimes.

Read Part 1, Part 2, Part 3, Part 4.

"Hello, Lokitty" Part 5

Loki wished that he had an army this time,
even the inferior formation
that the Chitauri had proven to be.

Instead he had a Phase Two gun
that might or might not fire properly
if he pulled the trigger,
his strength, his magic,

and his wits.

Never let it be said
that Loki of Asgard
came unarmed to any fight.

Loki shot at alter!Bruce.

Alter!Bruce ... somehow managed
to be elsewhere at the time.
Without magic,
insofar as Loki could tell.

Loki used his gun,
and his fists and his feet,
and quite a wide assortment of spells,
without connecting once.

With grudging admiration,
Loki recognized the dodging skills
of a fellow victim.

That at least gave him an idea.

"What kind of a coward is it
who abandons his teammates
and his entire world
to take a vacation in a desert resort?"
Loki said.

On the top of the bookcase,
Bruce's eyes glinted green.

Loki realized.
Hulk-out in 3 ... 2 ... 1 ...

The bookcase emitted
an ominous groan.

There was really an unreasonable amount
of space between Loki and the door.

The next minute,
a rather confused tiger
in a vivid shade of lime green
was perched on the remains of the bookcase
and a pile of slippery paperbacks.

A magnificent bit of flyting
blossomed in Loki's mind
and fell out of his mouth
before he could stop himself:

"Tiger, tiger, burning bright
In the desert of the night
What bouquet of handsome lies
Made you think that you were wise?"

With a massive snarl,
the green tiger pounced.

Loki realized that teasing alter!Hulk
was still a terrible, horrible idea.

Loki squirmed free.
He had, after all,
grown up wrestling with Thor.
He knew how to cope
when faced with an unstoppable force.

At least the Hulk
couldn't throw him out of an airplane.

The green tiger did, however,
swiftly catch up to Loki
and pin him to the ground again.

Loki broke loose -- barely --
and this time took the precaution
of filling the room with false images.

The damn cat didn't even slow down.
He was, somehow, smarter than Thor
even in this brutish form.

Loki winced as the Hulk
tackled him yet again.

Hot, damp breath blew against his face.

Loki felt the fabric of reality
buckle and twist around him.
Desperate, he snatched at the power
and flung it full force at the Hulk.

Then the spell backfired and ...

Hello Lokitty.

It was the most humiliating setback of all.

There he was, a tiny white cat
with a dark mask and paws,
long fluffy fur, and horns.

Worst of all, Loki could tell
from the way everything looked
that his eyes had reverted
to their natural Jotun red,
though why that should happen
he had no idea.

The woman Ash picked him up.
Loki tensed, waiting for her
to throw him into another cage.

Instead she cradled him in her arms,
one hand steady under his feet,
the other gently prodding at him.

Checking him for injuries,
he realized dumbly,
although the scratches had healed
in the transformation.

Satisfied with her findings,
Ash rubbed his head between the horns
and then stroked down his back.

Oh. Oh, that was like
nothing Loki had ever felt before.
It was torture, yes it was,
made of pleasure instead of pain.

I must resist this enchantment,
he told himself. I must.

Altogether against his will,
Loki began to purr.

Kay announced
that the Tesseract
hat resumed its normal shape,
which in this world was apparently
an enormous ring of which the compound
was only a small part.

By then, evil!Schrodinger
was doubtless long gone

and so was the green tiger,
reverted back to fuzzy brown Bruce
sprawled on the rug
with his paws over his nose.

After hulking out,
alter!Bruce slept for a day ...
just like any cat.

* * *


The Avengers shows Thor throwing Loki out of a plane, and the arrival of the Chitauri army assigned to Loki.

Loki has poor impulse control.

"The Tyger" is a classic poem that provided inspiration for Loki's flyting.

Cats really do sleep most of the day. Being a cat is very relaxing. Bruce needs to unwind more.

See the images that helped inspired this poem in my "Hello, Lokitty" scrapbook.


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Date: 2014-01-03 11:19 am (UTC)
jeshyr: Blessed are the broken. Harry Potter. (Default)
From: [personal profile] jeshyr
Eeeeeee Ash hugged him to bits!!! This poem made me so very very happy :)

Bits from the others - since I read it all tonight - I loved Tiger-hulk! Incidentally I had somehow missed and/or forgotten the existance of the Schrodinger's Hulk series so that's on my to-read list now.

This is my favourite footnote of all time:
"On rare occasions, cats can be aggressive. There are tips for discouraging your cat from attacking you. Those are probably all invalidated if you are trying to take over the world at the time."

The phrase "disturbingly more organised" to describe the Schrodinger's crew really tickled my fancy.

<3 <3 <3 Muchly enjoyed long poem! Oh, and I did not know the word "flyteing" so that's an awesome new one for me. I love the idea of poetic insult battles!

Thankyou for your awesome writings :)

Re: Yes...

Date: 2014-01-04 09:02 am (UTC)
jeshyr: Blessed are the broken. Harry Potter. (Default)
From: [personal profile] jeshyr
>> Incidentally I had somehow missed and/or forgotten the existance of the Schrodinger's Hulk series so that's on my to-read list now. <<

I hope you enjoy it.

I am enjoying it greatly, actually. My biggest problem with SH is that there are so many characters and I can never remember them - it's a problem I have for a while with pretty much any ensemble-cast media in any format, really. I really really want to like SH because everything I read about it tells me that I'll like it for about a billion reasons, but every time I read something that isn't based around a single character I get hideously confused and end up stopping ... the fact that the cast keeps multiplying in variant ways seems to make my brain fail in frustrating ways. So anyway by adding a central character that I already have a good handle on from Avengers fandom, I'm enjoying it much more. It's OK to read "Safekeeping" and forget who some of the SH characters are because I know Bruce/Hulk so it's working as a really effective anchor for me!

I really wish I knew *why* I found SH so confusing, because I've read tons of your other original work and I don't have the same problem with anything else. It bugs me because I'm quite certain that if I can ever read enough to figure out the cast I'll really enjoy it - from all accounts it hits pretty much all of my fiction preferences... I've just started reading "Two Spirits, One Past" so I'll let you know how I go :)

Re: Yes...

Date: 2014-01-04 11:41 am (UTC)
jeshyr: Blessed are the broken. Harry Potter. (Default)
From: [personal profile] jeshyr
>> My biggest problem with SH is that there are so many characters and I can never remember them - it's a problem I have for a while with pretty much any ensemble-cast media in any format, really. <<
Bummer. I have that problem too. It's hard for me to distinguish characters unless they look and sound very different, with a lot of unique traits. I'd have no trouble doing this if Schrodinger's Heroes happened to be a TV show in this world, but as text, it's a little harder.

Unfortunately TV doesn't help me a lot - I am a fair degree of face-blind so if the characters are very visually distinct I go well but if there are multiple people that fit any given four-ish word description ("woman with curly red hair" for example) I'm apt to confuse them. My friends are used to me pausing movies and saying "Is that the good guy or the bad guy?" a lot, especially because "white guy with short dark hair" is so very generic there's usually multiple people in any given visual medium which fit it.

I always have trouble with large ensemble casts, I don't know if everybody does or it's just me but some of the time when I'm reading a really good book I actually end up making my own sketchy cast list while I'm reading just to keep characters straight. Usually by halfway through the book, at most, I don't need it - it just takes a while to sort out. Sometimes just making the list is enough to sort them out in my head.

>> but every time I read something that isn't based around a single character I get hideously confused and end up stopping ... the fact that the cast keeps multiplying in variant ways seems to make my brain fail in frustrating ways. <<
Sorry for the confusion. You can always prompt for it in any open prompt call and specify that you want to focus on one specific character. I've done a few pieces like that, character studies and so forth.

Thanks for the suggestion - I hadn't thought of that! I'll keep it in mind, it's a good idea.

>> I really wish I knew *why* I found SH so confusing, because I've read tons of your other original work and I don't have the same problem with anything else. <<
I really appreciate that feedback.
*ponder* This is the first project where I felt inclined to use script format instead of just poetry or fiction like I usually do. I think that may impact the way I handle descriptions here, throwing more emphasis on dialog and action, less on visual cues. It's the only big difference I can think of between Schrodinger's Heroes and my other work.

It may be the script format, but I suspect it's also related a whole bunch of things. I thought about this for ages when I was resting this afternoon and heres my brain dump:

1. Script format has less visual description than standard format.

2. SH has multiple versions of many characters. If I have trouble keeping Alex and Ash and Kay apart, for example, having to deal with alter!Morgan and good!Schrodinger and bad!Pat and kitten!Alex, etc, is enough to completely crash my brain. The different!Forms don't resolve in my head at all if I can't remember who Forms is, if that makes sense?

3. Character names that have less information inside them than names usually do - names often explicitly tell gender and frequently they also contain strong hints about race/culture and even socio-economic status. We can guess/generalise a lot about "Victoria Edwards, III" and "DeShawn Jackson" and "Kim Mei" and it won't always be accurate but it's a handle that gives the reader a place to start recalling things. As a reader I'm guaranteed that "Victoria Edwards" is not a homeless Vietnamese character in your novel, and the British head of state is never called "Li Kim" because even if it actually happened in RL nobody would believe it in a novel - fiction has to be sensible to a degree that reality doesn't.

With my social justice cap on I totally adore that you use names which don't specify gender or clearly encode race or class! I would rather make myself the occasional cast list to help me get into a book if it meant authors weren't constrained as much by stereotypes/generalisations. Please don't misunderstand - I am absolutely not saying I'd be happier if you used names that clearly encoded these things, I like what you do far better, I'm just noting the way it changes my mental processing.

4. You do the same with avoiding common character and story tropes - being less predictable than normal. Once we figure out that Victoria Edwards is the innocent heroine of the book we have a bunch of generalisations about her that are also probably true: She'll have had a clean-cut upbringing, she won't be disabled or pregnant out of wedlock, she won't die before the end of the book, she won't ever get together with the bad-boy antihero character because she's clearly destined for the hero, who will probably fall in love with her. Stories where there is less use of character tropes and established story types are MUCH more interesting to read, but they are also undeniably more work mentally for the reader because many shortcuts are removed.

5. I'm not sure about this one, it may just be my perception because I'm feeling overwhelmed with all the characters I don't recall well, but I feel like SH has more characters that tend to be in each story than much of your other work. When I think about Hart's Farm, for example, there are a lot of characters in the series but each specific work tends to focus on a very small subset of them. Ensemble TV episodes generally tend to have all of the core cast in most of the episodes I think.

I thought about this way too much, haven't I? And 3 and 4, at least, are things that I never never never want you to change - it's part of why your writing is awesome!!

I don't have any neat conclusion here, except that I plan to go read more crossovers and hopefully that'll help :) Thanks again for making so much awesome fiction available to read free, it makes me very very very happy <3

Re: Yes...

Date: 2014-01-05 10:59 am (UTC)
jeshyr: Blessed are the broken. Harry Potter. (Default)
From: [personal profile] jeshyr
Since we're discussing it I went back to the recommended SH starting page at http://penultimateproductions.weebly.com/start-here.html and started reading, making a cast list as I went. The first thing it points me to is the canon page at http://penultimateproductions.weebly.com/canon.html so I started reading links there in order. Having read the "About the Show" page and the articles in the "Characters" heading my cast list looks like this:

Alex - Leader, science genius, crap at social, ADHD-ish, rich. Asexual-ish. White woman with curly sand-coloured hair & glasses.

Ash - Research/computer geek, speaks many languages, calm/focussed, poor. Asexual aromantic. Native American woman with straight back hair and copper skin.

Bailey - Commonsense/down to earth, organises, good with hardware, builds stuff. Bisexual. Mixed-race man with wavy brown hair and tan skin.

Kay - Security guard, ex-military with medical training. Not monosexual, BDSM interests. Hispanic woman with curly black hair, fairly pale skin.

Morgan - Astronomer, very down to earth and somewhat sheltered compared to others. Vanilla, monosexual. Hawiian woman of mixed-race background with straight black hair and tinted skin.

Pat - Does social stuff, PR, negotiations, etc. Good cook. Pansexual, poly. Black man with nappy black hair and milk chocolate skin.

Quinn - Can deal with anything. Well travelled, much pop-culture/history knowledge. Dislikes labels & binaries - up for most things. French-Canadian man with fair skin and varying hair.

Kat - Pansexual, poly.

Tim - Tentacle monster. Alien baffled/fascinated by lots of earth stuff. Unclear sexuality. Tall pile of writhing tentacles of varying sizes, can change colour.

Chris - Muscle of the team. Good friends with Pat. White man, large, blond hair.

Dusty - Refugee from another dimension, ally but not team member. Lesbian. Woman with olive skin and dark wavy hair.

Jayden - Army officer. Straight, divorced, 2 kids. Tall black woman with tightly curled black hair.

Midge - Reporter with excellent research skills, can pickpocket and forge but not highly educated. Bi but prefers woman partners. Short white woman with freckles and red hair.

Schrodinger - Alex’s cat. Male with short black fur.

Vic - Ally not team member. Professor and writer, highly educated. Gay and kinky, currently dom, past sub. British man with wavy brown hair greying.

Having finished everything on the 'canon' page and all the 'what should I read first' on the 'start-here' page, I have Male!Morgan, Evil!Midge, and Evil!Schrodinger added to that list - I ignored all the other different forms on the assumption they wouldn't matter too much. But now I haven't read any stories yet and there are eighteen characters on my list ...

I'm guessing that some of those characters don't really show up much but I can't tell that from the cast lists and they don't seem to be in much significant order - I've heard a lot about Schrodinger but he's second last to be introduced, so I don't feel like I can assume I only need to know the top few.

Going to read all the fiction on the start-here page now, since I have the easiest time with following fiction generally ...

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Date: 2014-01-04 02:30 am (UTC)
siliconshaman: black cat against the moon (Default)
From: [personal profile] siliconshaman
Just wanted to say how very much I enjoyed this epic poem!

Although, now he's stuck there one cannot hope that Ash decides to take in Stray!Lokitty and starts untangling his daddy issues.. [or daddy caused issues.]

That said... a sane and well adjusted Loki is either boring, or a cause for concern....

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Date: 2014-02-02 12:23 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] natf

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Date: 2014-08-23 07:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] book_worm5.livejournal.com
Heh, that was fun. I don't think I followed all the quantum warping, but that's okay. I went looking for green tigers and found this stock image: http://eu.fotolia.com/id/57410431 () Perhaps it should be Bruce's next T-shirt. :-)

There's also this (http://deathangle121.deviantart.com/art/green-tiger-192423845) that someone made, though I don't know where the original tiger photo came from.


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