Poem: "Polishing Winter"
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ysabetwordsmithThis poem was written outside the regular prompt calls, and is posted here as barter for dialecticdreamer posting "Workshop Progress" so you can read Part 1 of her story already. It belongs to the series Frankenstein's Family.
"Polishing Winter"
After Victor granted permission for Nandru
to flood the low part of the common meadow,
which wasn't in high demand during winter,
it turned into a communal project to keep
the village children out of the woods
until abandoned traps could be
picked up by the adults.
Nandru recruited the older children
to trim down the grass and the younger ones
to run in circles trampling it all flat.
First he pumped water until the stone tank
for the livestock was overflowing all over the ground.
Then he organized a bucket chain to add more water
to places where the pump couldn't easily reach.
Victor kept an eye on the project as he visited
the village regularly to attend the whole mess of
concerns left behind by the abrupt banishment of Artúr.
Before long, the new attraction had drawn in
not just the children but the adults as well,
especially the courting couples.
The inevitable trickle of twisted ankles
and sprained wrists began, bringing people
to Victor and Igor for treatment.
It didn't help that so few of the villagers
had proper skates, even ones made from
wood or bone instead of good steel, but
several victims complained of stumbling which
sent Victor out to examine the lay of the ice.
"Look at these lumps," he pointed out
to Nandru. "They're tripping people."
"It's from the grass underneath, and
using the buckets," Nandru said. "Ice
on the ground doesn't form up all flat
the way it does on a pond or a river, but
like you said, nobody can fall through."
"Just see if you can figure out how to
smooth some of the surface. Take care
to keep your lungs warm too," Victor said,
reaching to tug Nandru's scarf up
over his nose and mouth.
"Yes, mazil," said Nandru,
voice muffled through the thick wool.
Vladimir looked around at the people
milling about the ice and said, "Perhaps
a temporary fence would help keep the crowd
from getting so thick that they collide. I'm busy
making rope, Nandru, but you could probably
handle something like this ..." He paused
to scratch a design into the ice, sections
roped together so they could be moved,
as for penning sheep and goats to graze.
Imre muttered something about
the poor design of the skates,
and their tendency to slip loose,
then wandered off to his forge.
The next time Victor checked the field,
it was as sleek as a mirror.
"How in the world did you manage this?"
Victor asked, impressed by the change.
"We used planes and scrapers to shave off
the high spots, and then polished it with
hot bricks," Nandru said with a grin.
"It's like polishing winter itself!"
Victor looked around at the trains of children where
older siblings were towing the younger ones
with a scarf or a scrap of rope.
Ilona had fenced herself off in a corner where
she doggedly tried to master the steel blades
that Imre had actually fastened to a pair
of old boots with horseshoe nails.
Several people had rigged a pulley
much like for a ferry -- probably borrowed
from a hay hoist not needed in this season --
to tow a sleigh back and forth so the old and infirm
could enjoy the ice alongside their families.
The portable fences cobbled up by Nandru
at Vladimir's suggestion worked beautifully
to funnel people onto and then off of the ice
so they didn't crash into each other as often.
Igor stood at the exit in case of injuries,
most of which needed no more than
a supportive wrap and a warning
to stay off it for a day or two.
"Well done," Victor said to Nandru as they
watched the villagers at their new sport.
On the ice, Bogdana gave a rare cackle of glee
as she rode the sleigh with Adam in her lap,
red shawl flapping behind them like wings.
* * *
Notes:
You can built your own backyard ice rink and make a smooth surface in various ways, such as using a plane.
Ice skating dates back thousands of years, and ice skates have evolved a lot since then.
Ice chairs may be propelled by sticks or by a person. In this case, a winch has been used similar to a cable ferry. This patent shows how a boat or sleigh can be hauled back and forth.
dialecticdreamer posting "Workshop Progress" so you can read Part 1 of her story already. It belongs to the series Frankenstein's Family."Polishing Winter"
After Victor granted permission for Nandru
to flood the low part of the common meadow,
which wasn't in high demand during winter,
it turned into a communal project to keep
the village children out of the woods
until abandoned traps could be
picked up by the adults.
Nandru recruited the older children
to trim down the grass and the younger ones
to run in circles trampling it all flat.
First he pumped water until the stone tank
for the livestock was overflowing all over the ground.
Then he organized a bucket chain to add more water
to places where the pump couldn't easily reach.
Victor kept an eye on the project as he visited
the village regularly to attend the whole mess of
concerns left behind by the abrupt banishment of Artúr.
Before long, the new attraction had drawn in
not just the children but the adults as well,
especially the courting couples.
The inevitable trickle of twisted ankles
and sprained wrists began, bringing people
to Victor and Igor for treatment.
It didn't help that so few of the villagers
had proper skates, even ones made from
wood or bone instead of good steel, but
several victims complained of stumbling which
sent Victor out to examine the lay of the ice.
"Look at these lumps," he pointed out
to Nandru. "They're tripping people."
"It's from the grass underneath, and
using the buckets," Nandru said. "Ice
on the ground doesn't form up all flat
the way it does on a pond or a river, but
like you said, nobody can fall through."
"Just see if you can figure out how to
smooth some of the surface. Take care
to keep your lungs warm too," Victor said,
reaching to tug Nandru's scarf up
over his nose and mouth.
"Yes, mazil," said Nandru,
voice muffled through the thick wool.
Vladimir looked around at the people
milling about the ice and said, "Perhaps
a temporary fence would help keep the crowd
from getting so thick that they collide. I'm busy
making rope, Nandru, but you could probably
handle something like this ..." He paused
to scratch a design into the ice, sections
roped together so they could be moved,
as for penning sheep and goats to graze.
Imre muttered something about
the poor design of the skates,
and their tendency to slip loose,
then wandered off to his forge.
The next time Victor checked the field,
it was as sleek as a mirror.
"How in the world did you manage this?"
Victor asked, impressed by the change.
"We used planes and scrapers to shave off
the high spots, and then polished it with
hot bricks," Nandru said with a grin.
"It's like polishing winter itself!"
Victor looked around at the trains of children where
older siblings were towing the younger ones
with a scarf or a scrap of rope.
Ilona had fenced herself off in a corner where
she doggedly tried to master the steel blades
that Imre had actually fastened to a pair
of old boots with horseshoe nails.
Several people had rigged a pulley
much like for a ferry -- probably borrowed
from a hay hoist not needed in this season --
to tow a sleigh back and forth so the old and infirm
could enjoy the ice alongside their families.
The portable fences cobbled up by Nandru
at Vladimir's suggestion worked beautifully
to funnel people onto and then off of the ice
so they didn't crash into each other as often.
Igor stood at the exit in case of injuries,
most of which needed no more than
a supportive wrap and a warning
to stay off it for a day or two.
"Well done," Victor said to Nandru as they
watched the villagers at their new sport.
On the ice, Bogdana gave a rare cackle of glee
as she rode the sleigh with Adam in her lap,
red shawl flapping behind them like wings.
* * *
Notes:
You can built your own backyard ice rink and make a smooth surface in various ways, such as using a plane.
Ice skating dates back thousands of years, and ice skates have evolved a lot since then.
Ice chairs may be propelled by sticks or by a person. In this case, a winch has been used similar to a cable ferry. This patent shows how a boat or sleigh can be hauled back and forth.
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Date: 2015-12-04 03:35 am (UTC)Thank you!
Date: 2015-12-04 03:38 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2015-12-04 03:49 am (UTC)Yes...
Date: 2015-12-04 03:56 am (UTC)Favorite parts--
Date: 2015-12-04 04:56 am (UTC)First, Nandru is a teenager, about the age when modern ones are looking for their first 'real job' outside home/family/neighborhood tasks. There's no real /system/ for figuring this out, yet Nandru is put in charge of the project as well. He gets the responsibility, AND the credit, because when the first attempt revealed a problem- the uneven surface-- Victor took the time to acknowledge the problem and encourage him.
The villagers did more than just enjoy the kids' work, though, they pitched in with specific skills and suggestions and still kept the project as entirely Nandru's.
It's also clear that as the rink got safer to use, more and more of the kids were allowed to spend their free time there, which also showed trust in Nandru's ability to keep an eye on them.
Most of the literature of the time was about /meeting the exacting standards/ imposed from top down, whether by the mazil, the beekeeper, a parent, or an older sibling. I love that the whole village has ditched "one right way" thinking in favor of "How do we solve this?"
Now, I'm REALLY looking forward to prompting for the spring travelers who are looking for apprentices; some may be stunned, and some may be horrified. (May the latter be forced to buy from a certain vendor of inferior teas!)
This isn't a long-term project, though I can imagine many, many disappointed faces when the rink begins to thaw in the spring, but it has the potential to become a yearly tradition.
Re: Favorite parts--
Date: 2015-12-04 06:20 am (UTC)Thank you!
>> It's so vividly illustrative of the NEW thinking that the mazil and Igor brought, and how that attitude has permeated the village in a little under two years.<<
:D That's what I wanted to do with this whole series, really -- show how much could be accomplished if the scientists would just teach the villagers instead of looking down on them. So now we've got a whole village full of people who look on problems as opportunities.
>> First, Nandru is a teenager, about the age when modern ones are looking for their first 'real job' outside home/family/neighborhood tasks. There's no real /system/ for figuring this out, <<
There is a system -- several of them -- just not what we have. A majority of children take up the same trade as their parents. However, some people don't have children, and some children just have no skill for their parents' work. Consequently there is some swapping around through apprentice positions.
Young people are given responsibilities as they grow older, and the adults watch to see what they are good at, or not. It's a little harder for someone like Nandru with no close relatives, who kind of belongs to the village as a whole. Finding exactly the right sort of work for him is awkward. But he's a hard worker, so people keep offering him opportunities.
>> yet Nandru is put in charge of the project as well. He gets the responsibility, AND the credit, because when the first attempt revealed a problem- the uneven surface-- Victor took the time to acknowledge the problem and encourage him. <<
:D You'll see the same pattern with several other adults, like Denes and Imre, whose work also requires attention to detail and a certain tolerance for trying new things that might not always work perfectly on the first attempt.
>> The villagers did more than just enjoy the kids' work, though, they pitched in with specific skills and suggestions and still kept the project as entirely Nandru's. <<
Traditional villages are quite good at figuring out who's best at what. Most people have a specialty, in addition to the general skills. And kids never learn responsibility if you take it away from them as soon as they do something worth having.
>> It's also clear that as the rink got safer to use, more and more of the kids were allowed to spend their free time there, which also showed trust in Nandru's ability to keep an eye on them. <<
Yay! I'm glad that came through. Once it was really safe, in fact, the sleigh came out and everyone was able to enjoy a ride.
>> Most of the literature of the time was about /meeting the exacting standards/ imposed from top down, whether by the mazil, the beekeeper, a parent, or an older sibling.<<
Yeah, that sucked. That's what leads to being trapped in a windmill set on fire. >_<
>> I love that the whole village has ditched "one right way" thinking in favor of "How do we solve this?"<<
My gothic fluff, let me show you it.
>> Now, I'm REALLY looking forward to prompting for the spring travelers who are looking for apprentices; some may be stunned, and some may be horrified. (May the latter be forced to buy from a certain vendor of inferior teas!) <<
That's going to be so much fun to see!
>>This isn't a long-term project,<<
It's not meant to be. Young people do best by learning on short-term projects. The filly, now -- she is a long-term project, but that was Nandru's own idea and people made sure that he understands what he's getting into.
>> though I can imagine many, many disappointed faces when the rink begins to thaw in the spring, <<
Yeah, that's inevitable. Maybe they can find a replacement, like a shared garden or a swimming hole.
>>but it has the potential to become a yearly tradition.<<
Oh yes! :D
Re: Favorite parts--
Date: 2015-12-04 01:19 pm (UTC)Other than that, yeah, Nandru is in an odd place because he's on his own, but half-supervised by practically every adult in the village. They're looking for places he'll fit, not simply shoving him into the first job and leaving him there.
Re: Favorite parts--
Date: 2015-12-04 06:38 pm (UTC)Oh. Yeah, that's true. "You could make an ice rink" rather than "You'd need to flood the common meadow, fill any gaps in the ice, smooth it out," etc. It's not just an exercise in construction, but in planning.
>> Other than that, yeah, Nandru is in an odd place because he's on his own, but half-supervised by practically every adult in the village. They're looking for places he'll fit, not simply shoving him into the first job and leaving him there. <<
:D It's working out tolerably well, not perfect, but enough that isn't causing problems.
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Date: 2015-12-04 05:34 am (UTC)Thank you!
Date: 2015-12-04 05:44 am (UTC)I'm happy to hear that.
>> And planes are my favorite kind of tool. Not used quite as often as drills and screwdrivers, but much more satisfying.<<
There is a rhythm to them which can be very soothing.
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Date: 2015-12-04 05:47 am (UTC)Yes...
Date: 2015-12-04 05:49 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2015-12-05 11:29 am (UTC)Well...
Date: 2015-12-05 11:31 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2015-12-05 04:42 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2015-12-04 02:13 pm (UTC)Yay!
Date: 2015-12-04 06:34 pm (UTC)