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This poem came out of the May 19, 2015 Poetry Fishbowl. It was inspired by [personal profile] dialecticdreamer. It also fills the "outnumbered" square in my 5-18-15 card for the [community profile] origfic_bingo fest. This poem has been sponsored by Anthony & Shirley Barrette. It belongs to the series Path of the Paladins.


"Who Gives of Himself"
-- a ghazal


Shahana explains to Ari as they gather with others to pray,
"To be a saint of Gailah requires one who gives of himself."

Along with Gailah's old Tevorn is Diawn's younger Madralay,
Who says, "I ain't fancy, but I'm someone who gives of himself."

The middle-aged man who serves Syvera has gone as gray
as the paint horse he rides, yet still stands to give of himself.

The service of Zyweet the Trickster is not so easy a play,
But one woman turns aside the plaint and gives of herself.

Ligia's seer is light of tongue as the birds that wing by the way,
Twittering of the taint she has seen, so she gives of herself.

The scholar who looks to Plumere soon holds them all in sway,
Weaving complaint on complaint to reveal how he gives of himself.

Talaton's own nods her head at the news, tilts the balance away,
and says, "How quaint. Who will dance with me as I give of myself?"

A smith of Barzay holds out her hand. "I'll take that roundelay,"
she says, "and acquaint you with the steps I give of myself."

Yasun has sent a healer to join the row of talents upon display,
who frowns at violence, but shows restraint, and gives of himself.

But one is outnumbered, uncounted by the officiant on this day --
There is in their company no saint of Gorrein who gives of himself.

* * *

Notes:

You can read more about the ghazal form online.

A saint is someone who epitomizes the tenets of their religion, so the qualifications vary somewhat from one tradition to another.  For all the fuss and bother some religions make of them, saints actually tend to lead rather quiet lives.  The Jewish concept of tzadikim  reflects this.

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Date: 2015-05-24 01:27 am (UTC)
ext_45721: Rabbit lying on a couch, reading large, antique book of Poe. (Default)
From: [identity profile] caudelac.livejournal.com
/APPLAUSE.

Ghazals are a pain in the ass to write!

Thank you!

Date: 2015-05-24 06:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com
I'm glad you liked it.

There are various rules for ghazals, from different times and regions, so not everybody follows all of them.

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Date: 2015-05-24 04:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rix-scaedu.livejournal.com
Does this indicate that Gorrein has more problems than he realises? That none of his people qualify for this or that none of those who do can be bothered to come?

Yes...

Date: 2015-05-24 04:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com
>> Does this indicate that Gorrein has more problems than he realises? <<

He has sooooo many more problems than he realizes. He had no real clue that anything was wrong until his allies all dumped him. He still doesn't really understand what is wrong. The social skills, he has them not.

>> That none of his people qualify for this or that none of those who do can be bothered to come? <<

He has saints. They just don't work or play well with others.

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